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christydreamin's avatar

CHAPTER 2 LET’S GOOOOOO ❤️

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Joakim Blytt's avatar

What I like here is how you take your time. The little details - the IKEA frustration, Fiona’s travel stories, Noah melting into the bean bag - make the whole scene feel like we’re sitting in that apartment too. It’s ordinary, almost cozy, which is exactly why the shift at the end hits so well. The laughter, the drinks, the first-night energy suddenly colliding with the sight of uniforms outside the window. It’s that clash between private rituals and public reality, and it makes the story feel both grounded and alive. Nicely done!

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